The deputy told me to empty my pockets: two quarters, a penny, a stick of bubble gum, and a roll of grip tape for my skateboard.
Questions: What do you notice?
What makes you think that?
What else can you see?
The sun comes out and you look around at all the changes the storm has caused: the outside chairs blown away, the Joshua trees plumped with water, the ground still a little wet.
Questions: What do you notice? ....What else?
How does it sound when we read it?
What would change if we removed this or that? ... Which do you prefer? Why?
Jumping in front of the frozen TV picture, like it's a magic wand, he waves the remote in circles.
Questions: What do you see? What did the author create?
His face turned the color of an avocado. He stood motionless, like he was nailed to the floor.
Questions: What particular words affect your senses (sight, touch, smell, hear, feel) What would happen if we changed this sentence and just said his face turned green? Which do you like better? What is strong writing verses weak writing?
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